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The briefest of gazes, the most cutting of stares,
The hollowest laughter and lightest of cares.
The gentlest touch and strongest of holds,
The greatest of longings fills up my soul.

Everything stops, life stalls when you're there,
Your ineffable beauty, proud and aware.
I'm hollowed and empty and grief fills my heart,
And swamps my whole being when we are apart.

Alone and at night, I focus my mind,
Projecting my thoughts across the divide,
I believe you can hear when I open my heart,
I have courage to speak only when we're apart.

I live off brief gazes when you look my way,
I fear your hollow laughter if you hear what I say.
My breath is so short and I longingly pine,
To hold you so tightly and say that your mine.

But you don't seem to hear my subliminal cares,
You still look straight through me as though I'm not there.
Made for the uber PoetryWeek competition, liminal.
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guitarangel1495 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
the last line gave me the chills, nice work
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"I believe you can hear when I open my heart,
I have courage to speak only when we're apart."

^ so true and relatable. especially now in the computer age where we all hide behind our phones or computers and somehow have the courage to say things that we couldn't say in person (i can't be the only one).
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stormuren Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Perfectly done rhythm and rhymes. I'm impressed!
:D
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DawnOfThyEmbrace Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Student Writer
The last two lines were one of the most beautiful things I have ever read here on dA , you are a very talented poet :) you deserve a watch :)
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PsychicSnail Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
High praise. Thankyou very much :)
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DawnOfThyEmbrace Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you for the watch and you're welcome :) whenever you find enough time check out some of my :gallery: as well :) tell me what you think about it when you do :D
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